I Love You
The three most powerful words
you could ever say
Love is used so much these days
and it can be used in so many circumstances
and can mean so many things
I love a lot of people
and in many different ways
I don't always know how I Love them
but I that I Love them
there's just something there
in me
for them
telling someone you Love them
can change so much
sometimes for better
sometimes for worse
it can have unexpected results
and chan change everything that has happened
in a blink of an eye
every day
I tell people that I Love them
I could say it many ways
I tell people I Love them
when I say good night
but if i texted or called them
out of the blue
just to say
I Love You
they would be puzzled
they would wonder why I did that
and would question how I Loved them
and how they themselves Loved me
telling someone you love them
is the msot powerful thing
someone can do
some people don't think they're loved
but they are
they just may not be told it
they may think
that they are not missed by anyone when they go somewhere
or that they don't mean anything to anyone
sometimes
I dont' realise this
until after I tell them
that I Love them
that I missed them when they left
and that they mean something to many people
one of them being me
how you react
when you someone says to you
I Love You
is also important
for you can break someone
into a million pieces
by doing one little thing wrong
and although you didn't mean it
its stil happened
and you should at least try
and fix it
there are so many forms of Love
far too many to say here
before a while ago
I thought/knew that no one had ever loved me in that way
but I am wrong
someone does
albeit not in a huge way
not in the way I've Loved others
but they still Love me
and thats all I care about
I've made many mistakes in life
we all do
more often than not
they are to do with Love
for through my eyes
Love controls all
George W. Bush may be able to destory the entire world
by doing one little thing
but if those who Love him so much
and those he Loves so much
tried to stop him
they'd prevail in the end
for we all Love
we may deny it
but we all do
I am always questiong my Love for people
and their Love for me
I don't want to
I can't help it
I am forever questioning how I Love people
friends
everyone
how do I Love them?
do I Love them for who they are?
do I Love them because I want to keep them safe from harm
and to stop them from doing anythign they'd regret?
or do I just Love them?
without meaning to
denying it at first
but then realsing
that I really do Love them
it's not just a crush
but I just
Love them
I tell them this
but they don't see it
I never know what to do in life
in all aspects of it
and just when i think I know what to do for once
in what part of my life
I realsie I'm wrong
and I've ruined so much
by telling them
that I love them
and it's never been the same since that night
I Love You
the three most powerful words
we can ever say
No matter how we say it
in words
in writing
of whatever language
or with an item
either way
we're telling that we Love them
that we will do so much for them
even if they do not realise this
even if it is pointless to Love them
we still do
so if there were 3 words that I wanted to know in every language
it would be those
and I say this to all who read this
I Love You
and depending on who you are
I may Love You
in a different way
to what you realise
but none the less
I am always here for you
and
I Love You















Comments
Criticism: long an so a a bit hard to get through
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soar away, Grey Eyes...
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I know I'm not very good, but I practice often, ok, DID practice often, i haven't drawn in aaaaaaaaaages but still. You ARE the art gods and give me great inspiration!
and Rinacat's the best! my writing isn't actually that bad at times now...
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Musical Angels fill the air so listen to them sing for you!
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I know I'm not very good, but I practice often, ok, DID practice often, i haven't drawn in aaaaaaaaaages but still. You ARE the art gods and give me great inspiration!
and Rinacat's the best! my writing isn't actually that bad at times now...
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Musical Angels fill the air so listen to them sing for you!
That is very good. I love it :B The length of it might put some people off, but it shows how much love (duh) and emotion is in this.
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soar away, Grey Eyes...
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I know I'm not very good, but I practice often, ok, DID practice often, i haven't drawn in aaaaaaaaaages but still. You ARE the art gods and give me great inspiration!
and Rinacat's the best! my writing isn't actually that bad at times now...
1. I see no structure to this at all there is no set sylable structure, or line structure. ok this can work really well sometimes but here it didn't.
2. The amount of times i read love in that was ridiculous, by the end of that i was ready to tear the next thing i saw with love on it even if it would mean printing this out just to do that.
3. It is far too long to be talking about love, you do not need to jabber on for about 150lines about how you may love someone. This was a pointless poem as you said at the start how you may love someone, there was no point for the rest of this.
4. The choice of wording was too simplistic and didn't create a image in the readers mind, it was bland and because of the length has the potential to make the reader shut off and hope for the end, thats what it did for me anyway.
5. I would suggest just scrapping this and taking the first the last and one or two of the stanza in between to make it a lot shorter just to make it a easy read, I am actually amazed that you got three favourites for this.
This has the potential to do well, but you need to get your thoughts together better, make it clear about the point, do NOT blabber on like you have here, make sure there is a good structure and possibly a flow to make it easier to read. You can hate me all you like for destroying you effort here, but i comment and criticise on what i strongly believe and you also have to remember i am a moderatly successful poet on AP with just over 100poems so don't take this the wrong way, ask mardle i comment harsh on things i am not keen on. DO keep writing and i think you can improve this a lot better with some more thought into the length and point of the poem
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